D#11 HW#7 Grammar Assignment #5

None of those grammar web sites are too much of a help. I just reviewed my writing and made corrections where i thought necessary. Please let me know if you see anything else that needs to be corrected, or if you think my corrections are wrong. Thanks!




The topic is not to be taken lightly, there are so many differing views based and personal opinions, experiences, and moral values.(first of all i think my first sentence sucks, honestly doesn't flow very well. If i were to rewrite it i would phrase it something like "There are so many differing views on the topic based on personal opinions, experiences, and moral vales, none of which should be taken lightly.) “When Leslee Unruh talks to young people, she uncoils a nest of rubber vipers: Herbie Herpes, Wally Wart, Hester Hepatitis, Albert AIDS and Lucy Loss of Reputation. And don't forget poor Pregnant Peggy Sue.
Unruh isn't selling souvenirs, she's using the snakes and other props to teach young people about the risks of sex before marriage. What she won't show kids, however, is how to protect themselves if they choose to ignore the lessons she and Herbie Herpes have to teach.” (Sternberg, Steve, USA Today, Sex education stirs controversy, 2002) Unruh is the founder of a taxpayer funded organization called the National Abstinence Clearing House,(I'm not positive, but i think i need a semi colon here) she believes that sex after marriage is the only message to put out. This whole article focuses on abstinence only education, explaining that it is the only way to stop the spread of STDs. (I think with this transition word "however" that i could let these ideas be part on its own paragraph.)However there is a portion dedicate to the opposing argument; “We firmly believe that abstinence is the foundation on which every teen pregnancy prevention program should be built. Ask any parent of a teenager; that would be their preference. But if you look at the studies, the data is going to tell you that it isn't necessarily realistic.” These opposing opinions come from Catherine Camacho, who is the deputy director of family health in the California Department of Health Services. The more logical opinion is Catherine’s, who believes that abstinence, life skills, and contraception should be taught in an effort to delay teens from having sex, and practicing safe sex when they choose to do so.